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Place where I belong-DN Angel- by ~kittykat8:iconkittykat8:



Warning: I'll warn you now.  For all those who dislike shounen-ai I recommend you stop here.  This is my first fan fiction that I wanted to experiment on for DN Angel.  I'm hoping for some critique as to where I could possibly improve to make stories more interesting to read.

In any case, here it is.


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"Niwa-kun!"

Daisuke Niwa looked behind him to see the love of his life calling his name and running towards him.  "Ah Harada-san how's it-"

"I'm in a hurry," she interrupted, "could you please do classroom duties for me again, please and thanks."  Risa gave him a quick hug and then hurriedly sped off past the school gates.  "Have fun, ja ne!"

Still preoccupied by the hug it wasn't until she was out of view that her words finally sunk in snapping him back to reality.  Letting his head droop down in utter sadness he let out a huge sigh. "Classroom duties again?  The things I would do just to please her."  He smiled and walked back towards the school.  He'd have to make it quick as he remembered what his mom had told him this morning just as he stormed out the door.

"Now Dai-chan, I want you to be at home at 5:04 pm and 27 seconds," Emiko said cheerfully.  Smiling before adding another afterthought, "or else."

He shivered to think of what his mother met by "or else" if he failed to return home by the desired time.

~An hour or so later~

"Whew, finally done," said Saehara, "Well, I'll see you tomorrow.  Bye."

"Bye!" yelled Daisuke as he ran towards the train station.  He glanced at his watch, "Hmm, 4:31pm, I can make it back in time." He thought happily.  Forgetting to watch in front of him, he looked up just in time to catch a glimpse of a face as they both collided knocking both of them to the ground.  "Itai, itai," he mumbled rubbing his head.  He looked around and saw another person on the ground.  Wondering what happened he remembered running...and then...his eyes widened and he quickly got up bowing to the stranger, "Gomen-nasai! Hontou-ni gomen-nasai."  Bowing over and over, face flushed with embarrassment.

"I'm fine," replied the stranger who got up and brushed himself off, "Are you alright?"

He tried to speak but words just wouldn't come out of his mouth.  "A bishounen!" Daisuke stood there in admiration, noting details of the stranger's features.  He was tall, thin and lean.  His hair was a deep purple with bangs that gracefully fell over and complimented the white tank top and black leather jacket that he was wearing.  However, one thing caught Daisuke's attention above all else, at that was his eyes...his eyes were a captivating violet that seemed as though they could pierce into his very thoughts...

"Hey kid, are you alright?" The stranger grasped the boy's shoulders shaking him lightly.

"I-i'm fine," he stuttered, shaking off his previous thoughts and returning to the situation at hand.

"That's good."  The stranger smiled back in response.  He took his hands off of the boy's shoulders and crossed them in front of his chest.  "Ehhh and here I was hoping it was some kawaii girl that I could ask for a date."

Daisuke's face flushed with a light blush.  "Well sorry if i'm not what you were expecting," he mumbled.

The stranger let out a soft laugh,"So what's your name kid?"

"Stop calling me a kid," he retorted, "...Niwa Daisuke, and you would be?"

The stranger slowly approached him.  He stared into Daisuke's eyes leaning closer and closer until their faces were merely a couple of inches apart.  Daisuke was sure his face was scarlet red.  He felt extremely warm and his heart was beating really fast.  Amused by the blushing face of the boy (next) to him, he decided the excitement would be too much for such an innocent to handle.  "Dark Mousy," he whispered into Daisuke's ear.  Before pulling back and walking away.

Daisuke could only stare as Dark walked away.  His heart slowly begen to calm down.  His watch alarm went off causing him to jump and go into a panic once again.  "Aah i'm going to be late!" he exclaimed.  Running as fast as he could to catch the train home.

Looking behind him, Dark Mousy stopped and watched as the redhead disappeared among the groves of trees and bushes.  "Daisuke...eh?  This will be interesting." He smirked and continued to walk towards the setting sun wondering if he'd ever encouter the boy again.
©2007-2009 ~kittykat8
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Author's Comments

I think I've mentioned everything I needed to at the beginning of the deviation. This was Chapter 1.

In any case I hope it was ok.

Characters (c) Yukiru Sugisaki

Chapter 2: [link]
Chapter 3: [link]
Chapter 4: [link]
Chapter 5: [link]
Chapter 6: [link]

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:icongothic-faerie6:
It's good..i don't know if i know how to give advanced critique...^^;
But this is written quite well...:clap:

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:iconkittykat8:
:giggle: thanks hun :glomp:

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i'm the cookie monster hear me roar!:)
:iconblue-shadow24:
I th8ink it's good, I haven't read DNAngel for awhile so i don't really remember all tthe characters and such, but I like it,. :D

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For a long time it gave me nightmares...
Having to witness an injustice like that.
It was a constant reminder of how unfair this world can be.
I can still hear them taunting him;
"Silly Rabbit, Trix are for kids."
:iconiletgo:
Yay! It's done! Been waiting, and I like!

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Hee hee heee
:iconkittykat8:
thank you :D anything I could improve on? =P

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i'm the cookie monster hear me roar!:)
:iconkittykat8:
:giggle: i wasn't entirely sure if you'd approve of it or not

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i'm the cookie monster hear me roar!:)
:icondark-hellion:
Its very good. all of the details are there to paint a full picture. but, what are the meanings of the Japanese phrases sprinkled throughout? (maybe a short guide at the end for those of us with no clue)

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do your soul a favor and read a little scripture. do it a big favor and accpet Christ Jesus. do it the best favor and have prayer after your acceptance.
:iconblue-shadow24:
I'm not sure, you write it good but the characters names confuse me, but that's probally since I don't remember DNAngel that well anymore... (I borrowed the manga up to Vol 8 from a friend last year) I would like to read more soon :aww:

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For a long time it gave me nightmares...
Having to witness an injustice like that.
It was a constant reminder of how unfair this world can be.
I can still hear them taunting him;
"Silly Rabbit, Trix are for kids."
:iconkittykat8:
Well i'm all done up to chapter 7. It's just a matter of posting it here ^_^

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i'm the cookie monster hear me roar!:)

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